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lenbogan
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Character Suggestion: Jaz Partelow
« Thread Started on Jul 12, 2005, 10:49am »

Age: 24
Planet of Birth: Earth
Sex: Female
Hair: Brown, shoulder length with highlights, always messy.
Eyes: Hazel
Skin: almost sickly pale
Height: 5'
Weight: 110 lbs

Jaz is a troubled girl. Quiet and moody, she keeps to herself for the most part, save for when she sees things. No one knows what she sees, and her state of terror leaves her in no condition to describe them. First manifesting themselves in her teens, she awoke in a hospital, her best friend comatose next to her and her memory all but missing.

The incident brought her much in the way of unwanted attention from the authorities of Venus, her homeworld but not planet of birth, who labeled her as the primary suspect in the case.

When she feels well, she can be an extremely warm companion, willing to listen and understand. But the visions come as they please, and never at opportune times, resulting in many broken relationships and missed opportunities. Her one true talent is mechanical repairs, almost nothing is past her ability to diagnose and patch.

An idiot savant in the field, Jaz was never officially granted a license to become a mechanic. Because of this she travels the system earning a living fixing what small things she can under the Union's radar and then moving on.

« Last Edit: Aug 21, 2005, 9:00pm by lenbogan »

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Re: Character Suggestion: Jaz Partelow
« Reply #1 on Aug 21, 2005, 7:29pm »

Hey not a bad start. I think you should look at a few of the other character suggestions since we do use a template of sorts when designing and/or suggesting characters. I also think you should be a little more specific on her physical features.

For example you said:

"Age: 24
Sex: Female
Hair: Brown
Eyes: Hazel
Height: 5'
Weight: 110"

Now I'll use one of my character as an example:

"Character Name: Elli "Marlin" Zaho
Planet of Birth: Ganymede
Age: 25
Hair color: Her original color is dark brown with hints or red, though she has been known to dye her hair based on the circumstances of her chosen profession
Hair Style: long and straight, about two feet in length
Eyes: dark brown
Skin: light tan
Height: 5’6”
Weight: 112 lb."

See the difference? I'm going to seen you a email soon assuming you still want to participate and let you know about this. Once you give us a little more detail I'll approve your character as soon as possible.

welcome to the group
later,
WoB-EE

« Last Edit: Aug 21, 2005, 7:31pm by EagleEye »

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